Grizzly Man Before and After

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Many questions arise with regard to Timothy’s mental condition, especially because he was so adamant about protecting a species that really did not need the protection. He had the motives to try and persuade the nation and expose the true nature of these creatures but failed because of his final outcome. His eccentric personality was recognized by Herzog which he used to convince the viewers that he had a symbolic relationship with the bears. The symbolisms of the relationships he had with the animals can be described as unusual because of his clingy and over-attached attitude.  It was once mentioned that Timothy would be more satisfied in life if he was an actual bear. He believed he would be happier in life if he could be physically be morphed into one. His personal connections led Timothy to believe that he was invincible around them. The invincibility that Treadwell claimed he had around the bears can be noted as unscientific because he was living on the edge of death and testing his luck in The Grizzly Maze. Over the countless amounts of hours that were originally recorded, Herzog masterfully configured a film that psychologically exposes Timothy’s manic side.

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As a viewer, questions arose regarding Timothy’s mental stability, especially because he was incredibly adamant about protecting these aggressive animals. His wild motives were ineffective in trying to unveil the true nature of these creatures to the nation, but sadly his life was abruptly ended. Timothy’s eccentric personality stuck out to Herzog, who used it to convince viewers that Timothy had a symbolic relationship amongst the bears. The symbolic relationships he had with the animals came across as unusual slightly due to his clingy and over-attached attitude. It was once mentioned that Timothy desired to be a bear. He believed that he would have more satisfaction in life if he could physically be morphed into one. His personal connections to the bears led Timothy to think that he was invincible in their presence. The sense of invincibility that Timothy acknowledged was definitely out of the ordinary since he was living on the edge of death by testing his luck in the Grizzly Maze. After inspecting the countless hours of footage, Herzog masterfully configured a film that psychologically hones in on Timothy’s manic side.